Lyrics of my recent song, I'm Me.

[TheMaverick]

Here they are, I would like some responses, please.

I'm Me

Livin' m'life clean,
Walkin tru da scene,
Y'all can see me...
Y'all can hear me...
Y'all wonderin' why I am me...
Dat's a funny question,
Coming from a funny man,
So take that drink of yours,
And shuv it up yo' can...

Chorus:
I'm me,
Your you,
Everybody wants to.
See you do your little thing
Make a little noise
An start to sing...

I'm comin tru in the spotlite,
Take a small stop.
I turn to da crowd,
Then my mind drops.
I forgot all my words,
I forgot all my sayings,
I forgot what I'm supposed to do,
I forgot all my prayings.
God gave me a gift,
But also gave me the shy.
Oh well, it aint my fault,
Because its just he an I.

-Chorus-

Look to my desk ,
As I wake up da nex' day,
I chickened out last night,
But I got no pay.
You see.
I couldn't handle da stress,
I couldn't handle me.
I ran from the crowd,
I hear booing really loud...
Wish it would stop,
Before I run into a drop.

-Chorus-

Its late into the night,
I am on da stage,
Starin' in the face of fear,
The crowd loves the playin.
I am rappin' do da beat,
Doing my new thing,
I can feel the heat,
Runnin' off my face as I sing...

[Ricky-K]

I think it sounds too much like Eminem's Lose Yourself. Where you inspired by that song?

[Chickensoupcheese]

Moved to Creation Gallery, as it is technically a creation.

First thing's first: I find that rapping instantly rips a song of any emotion, any depth. The only exception I've found to this rule is Eminem's work, as I do find him to be an exception in his field.

If you gave it a bit of "umph" musically though, then I'm sure it'd do well. But all the "do's", "dah's" and "y'alls" compress it into 2 dimensional lyricry.

Mind you, you should see my attempts at writing lyrics ^_^.

[TheMaverick]

Actually, I just read it over and it does sound a lot like Lose Yourself. Oh well. And CSC, post some lyrics, I want to read, bwahahahhaa.

[Thores]

YAY Lyrics! I write dumb lil songs all the frickin time. Maybe I'll post em sometime.

Anyway, I like your song. I've never heard Lose Yourself, so coolness.

[TheMaverick]

Thanks Thores.

[Mr. Fangora (Wum)]

Well that's pretty good. I've never touch 'Steve's' stuff as a rule so I wouldn't know.
Heh.
I've been known to throw a little ditty out now and again but I don't do songs;D

[TheMaverick]

Thanks for da compliment.