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Post by Rpgmikel on Nov 4, 2003 11:38:47 GMT -5
Okay, listen up... I am new here because I thought this was an awsome site ;D. And I trust the viewers here to give me some advice... I was reading some criticism of other peoples' stories...chuckling at them myself... realizing that mine just may as well suck... well, here it goes... Isaac lives in a small community in a caves in the mountains with his grandfather, training constantly for unknown reasons. One day your home town is under seige, you evacutate to the Airships and as your grandfather dies fighting you realize that there are unanswered questions, Where did your parents go? Who attacked (you believe it to be the Dark Elves... buuuut ut's not, hehe). And so you travel far and wide searching for your REAL home, seeing if you can find information on what may have caused Everything, as usual he meets new ppl and fights and things... Also he has flashbacks often... (Playable ones )... There is actually a love story somewhere, this is a VERY basic... not even FINISHED story outline, there is also some stuff about being part of an ancient clan that , as he learns later, can communicate with dragons... And there is a WAR of the Terrans (I don't like the term "humans") and the Elves... which you become a temporary general of... and the actual attackers are not dark elves but the D.LORDS... (D stands for Dragon) who were spawned in an alchemy project ages ago... well, sorry for wasting your time... PLEASE give your honest opinion... I know it kinda sounds dumb, but please take this seriously. Thanks again Srry, let me clear up a few things... You are Isaac... The title: Soul's Cry: Romance of Dragons* (*Romance of Dragons* Part may be changed... Soul's Cry is part of a series, the way FF works,not reelated, but similar and fun... hopefully... The original Game, Sould Enchanter I Was working on for the PlayStation... but My game CD got severly damaged... ) Thanks again for reading this...
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Post by Oin on Nov 4, 2003 12:04:58 GMT -5
Dont double post its counted as spam,just edit your last message with that info
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Post by NeonShadow on Nov 4, 2003 13:05:41 GMT -5
Ok, to settle one thing Isaac, you got that from Golden Sun , righ? No, no! Nothing wrong with that! I just felt that you should know that Isaac is japanese and his name in english is Robin. Also, every Isaac named character is Robin in english. Otherwise, sounds ok Edit: I forgot to say that you shouldn't tell us that they think Dark elfs attack but it was really the Dragons. Thats just spilling the beens on us. No one would want to play your game if they already knew what happens. Teasers usually make people want to play your game since they want to know more whats going on and cant stop. Thats why The Way is so good
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Post by Rpgmikel on Nov 4, 2003 19:12:24 GMT -5
I understand, but it's not spilling on you because Isaac (I catually like the name that fit the guy, really i found it from the Bible... hehe) because you learn the D.LORDS are the attackers like 1/3 through the game... so, yeah, thanks for replying though... appereciate it! (Sorry about the double post.. I'll try to not do it again, first time... and I'm learning! thanks for telling me though)
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Post by Busterman Zero on Nov 4, 2003 21:58:50 GMT -5
Sounds fairly basic in terms of plot...nothing that really sounds intresting. Of course, that was just the simple storyline, so I assume there will be a few nice twists included along the way.
Alchemy? Combined with Isaac, we have 2 Golden Sun references. Just be aware of that.
Please use proper english, which means so terms like 'ppl'. Now, short forms of a group of words is fine, but not one word, please.
And don't bash your own game. Doesn't make it sound good.
I'll be honest with you. The only thing that appeals to me is the playable flash backs. You should add choices to them and have them referenced to during the present time of the game. Adds a little to the replay, ya know?
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Post by NeonShadow on Nov 5, 2003 0:40:42 GMT -5
If you got the name from the bible it should be Isac with just 1 a
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Post by Rpgmikel on Nov 5, 2003 0:49:27 GMT -5
***EVERYONE!!! once I learn how to make a website I will have a short 5 min demo up! (most of it being the intro) Sorry about the "ppl" thing... I have been working on a school project . Anyway thanks BMZ... I understand what you mean by Golden Sun references... But alchemy sounded better than "science" or "chemistry"... And I'm using the Italian RTP for a select hero name... but i'ts hard naming two characters with one selection (Help here would be nice). And I will use what you said for the flashback... and that is a pretty simple plot outline... Right now I have about 28% of the entire story... so there is plenty of room for improvement. Thanks for the commentary, I really appereciate it! PS... define "bash"... PS (again) I know it's one 'a'... but I didn't want a direct Biblle rip... I have something against Matrix movies.... (they used too much Biblical terms) I just don't like Matrix... And on the spur of the moment I liked the name Isaac... I'm NOT TRYING TO RIP!!! Understand... I just like it
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Post by SickAndWretched on Nov 5, 2003 2:21:36 GMT -5
"bash" means to put down ones game and such..
and your game sound alright.. is it your 1st major attempt? (like you've already figured out how to most of tehe c oding you'll need)
and 5 minute demos are no fun.. at least make it like 15 or 30 minutes..
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Post by Rpgmikel on Nov 5, 2003 2:26:43 GMT -5
It is my first major attempt... and my first attempt at all... I have been working on it for a while... (Only 2 years...) And I have been learning many new techniques... And I will try to make it a longer demo... It's just I habe the hardest time making maps... I just don't know where to put ANYTHING! (And I'm STILL trying to learn to make a website... as if a game isn't hard ENOUGH!) PS. Sorry about bashing my own game... I really like it. It's just that some people I know *cough* Nathan*COUGH!* think it's... awkward... Thanks for all your input everyone! Feel free to post any more comments
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Post by NeonShadow on Nov 5, 2003 6:56:51 GMT -5
Hold it cowboy! You said 2 years? It took me 1 year to figure out how to make a lousy CBS and this is your 2 year after practice attempt? Not to be mean or eanything but for a 2 year experiance that story is pretty discouraging
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Post by Rpgmikel on Nov 5, 2003 20:10:15 GMT -5
Well... I HAD it for two years... Various reasons cause me to temporarily stop using RM2K for months... and... I had about 6 story changes. That's why I'm here asking you guys. I am not the best writer out there... but I'm the best writer where I am. So any suggestions will be considered. And I am not good with programming... But I am better now. And hey, I left out some detail so I wouldn't spoil it... Just think how FFVII would sound without all the twists. (I'm using that as an excuse... I want to be on the school debate team).
FFVII: Cloud Strife Joins a team of rebels to attack an evil corporation against Mako reactors... then he meets Aeris, a mysterious woman-... How WOULD you summerize the story of FFVII? Here's how I would do it... IT'S AN AWSOME STORY WITH GREAT CHARACTERS!!!
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Post by Smaug on Nov 5, 2003 20:51:36 GMT -5
Hmmm... Your story doesn't really sound that bad. Pretty cool. Just add some more twists and don't tell us about 'em. [shadow=green,left,300];DSMAUG;D[/shadow] (He he, I changed the color)
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Post by Rpgmikel on Nov 5, 2003 21:01:36 GMT -5
[shadow=blue,left,300]YAAAAY![/shadow]SUPPORT! Sorry, little excited there, *ahem*... Yes I DO plan to throw in some plot twists. Although since the Story is not yet completely written I am not sure where . Oh... and I plan to make a custom War system *CWS* for the "Temporary General in the Terran/Elven War" thing... think, Shining Force... without the "Battle Mode". And I don't know HOW to do it... I just know that I will find a way... Oh, and does anybody know how to make a NORMAL front-view Battle Syestem in RM2K3? Or how I can make my own chars? I would LOVE to use it for this game... But I don't want to Give up everything I made here.
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Post by Busterman Zero on Nov 5, 2003 21:38:12 GMT -5
[shadow=blue,left,300]YAAAAY![/shadow]SUPPORT! Sorry, little excited there, *ahem*... Yes I DO plan to throw in some plot twists. Although since the Story is not yet completely written I am not sure where . Oh... and I plan to make a custom War system *CWS* for the "Temporary General in the Terran/Elven War" thing... think, Shining Force... without the "Battle Mode". And I don't know HOW to do it... I just know that I will find a way... Oh, and does anybody know how to make a NORMAL front-view Battle Syestem in RM2K3? Or how I can make my own chars? I would LOVE to use it for this game... But I don't want to Give up everything I made here. Front view isn't normal in RM2k3, only for RM2k. Second, use image editors to make your own characters. Anything from MS Paint to Photoshop.
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Post by Rpgmikel on Nov 5, 2003 21:42:12 GMT -5
Mostly I mean battle animation charsets... like, the side-view battle poses
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